tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5731742043351043726.post3368911583815507816..comments2024-02-20T04:48:48.863-08:00Comments on krismulkey.com: The darkroomKris Mulkeyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10852555527567136103noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5731742043351043726.post-63897176556719341952011-07-22T18:02:51.817-07:002011-07-22T18:02:51.817-07:00I love the description of them sitting together, a...I love the description of them sitting together, and I liked her description of her experience with her photography class. <br /><br />I felt like the dialogue was a little stilted, but that's a hard thing to do (well, at least for me) and make it sound natural all the time.<br /><br />Nice job!angelahttp://tiaras-and-trucks.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5731742043351043726.post-46678135219157018882011-07-22T14:20:22.788-07:002011-07-22T14:20:22.788-07:00Hopefully I fixed some of the really bad stuff.
-...Hopefully I fixed some of the really bad stuff. <br />- KrisKris Mulkeyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10852555527567136103noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5731742043351043726.post-84246587931547212932011-07-22T09:40:47.882-07:002011-07-22T09:40:47.882-07:00Loved the mystery lurking in the closet!
I found ...Loved the mystery lurking in the closet!<br /><br />I found the switch from 3rd person to 1st person jarring after the 1st two lines of dialogue. And I wondered why if in college darkrooms freaked her out why she would want to see his darkroom, maybe if she asked to see some of his pictures and he turned her down?<br /><br />I loved the image of them drinking champagne and waiting for the perfectJenniferhttp://whispatory.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.com